I don't mind the first one.... however, if I was going to be picky.....
I would personally give the image more room to breathe - so to speak. For mine it is a little too tightly cropped.
The second, I would ease up on the white vignette. Again for mine, with Vignette, a little goes a looooooong way and that is double for white vignette.
I think that B&W works very well with this picture. The crop however is bothering me a bit. I will just tell you my perspective and it doesn't mean I'm right. So everything I write, you're allowed to take with either a grain of salt or a whole box of it.
The actual crop has her head cut... When I cut the head, I usually go for a much tighter crop than the one you've selected. In your image, my eyes wonder back and forth between the back of her head and the white dress (bosom) and I find it difficult to concentrate on her face which, in my opinion should be the real center of attention. So, with this in mind, I did the following crop and bits of adjustments to show my point. I didn't do the vignette since I just wanted you to see what my crop would bring out of your picture.
I like them both, but when it comes to BW I like what Marcel did much better. I get the artistic aspect you were going for and you can do either your version or Marcels, but I would definitely do the crop like Marcel. It draws your eyes in more and this could go for color or BW.
thanks for the comments , the way i was thinking is the veil is very much a part of the image, im not sure but i think for my taste i like more of the veil but ill keep looking back and forth over the next few days too make sure
too me the crop doesnt scream bride , the uncropped image there is no doubt
Have you thought about a white vignette on the colour version ?
Of the two submitted I think I prefer the B&W but both seem to be very complementary to the lovely young bride.