Just an update - I went back and re-did the photo. I think its better now and to be honest I have no idea why I processed it so bad the first time but it was a little to warm
I prefer the colour of the second shot but the contrast a little too much for my taste. The eyes have become a little too dark in the second shot. They could probably be dodged to brighten them quite a bit.
Like this (hope you won't mind my showing what I mean)
Yeah, that first one was way too warm. Her teeth were orange! The second is better, but her face does seem a bit hot and needs to be toned down. The lipstick is especially bright.
And I agree with Marcel. The eyes are what sell a portrait.