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[Lautermilch]

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[Horoscope Fish]

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Nice shot. Two things I notice right away are these:

1. It needs cropping (I cropped it 8:10 and that was working well for me). Is there a reason you took this shot landscape and not portrait?
2. Sister on the right needs bend that elbow. When it comes to models if it's a joint, it needs to be bent.

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[Moab Man]

Agree with the Fish. That arm looks awkward.

I like the black and white finish.

 

[Scott Murray]

Yep agree with fish, that arm looks very odd...

 

[fotojack]

Looks slightly underexposed, too. And yeah...awkward pose with that arm. Otherwise, nice shot.

 

[Lautermilch]

How about this one?

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[Horoscope Fish]

How about this one?

It's a good shot. It's a little crowded, top and bottom though, so here's what I suggest as far as cropping goes. It moves the subject off-center, brings her eye onto a one-third line, eliminates the needless weight and distracting elements to the sides of the subject and focuses the eye more squarely ON the subject:
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[Lautermilch]

It's a good shot. It's a little crowded, top and bottom though, so here's what I suggest as far as cropping goes. It moves the subject off-center, brings her eye onto a one-third line, eliminates the needless weight and distracting elements to the sides of the subject and focuses the eye more squarely ON the subject:
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That was done inside a Ramada Inn in downtown Hollywood, Florida. We had permission but had to stay away from guest so each show was done in a hurry.

All images - https://www.flickr.com/photos/lautermilch/sets/72157650083851219/