Constructive criticism (2)
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Horoscope Fish
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Re: Constructive Criticism please
First shot, on the left... Before you do anything you need to kill the reflection of the button on the breast pocket. It's a veritable beacon of distraction. I think the model is too centered in the frame, her face is a little blown out and the shot is too dark and heavy in the overall, but particularly in the background.
First shot, on the left... Before you do anything you need to kill the reflection of the button on the breast pocket. It's a veritable beacon of distraction. I think the model is too centered in the frame, her face is a little blown out and the shot is too dark and heavy in the overall, but particularly in the background.
Horoscope Fish
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Re: Constructive Criticism please
I think you just pinned down what's been bugging me about that shot. Quartering away, I think, would have helped. Like the bokeh in the shot though.
Re: Constructive Criticism please
I'm hesitant to say anything, and have been putting it off. Because I think they show a lot of planned work, and came out pretty good, and I really don't want to criticize. I like the soft off-camera flash on the left one, and the rear lighting on both.
But I do have a couple of objections. One is that both show too much flash exposure. The skin tones are overexposed on the left one, flat, not even pink. The dress just clearly shouts overexposed too (the button itself does not bother me, a bit less flash would solve it). The right one is not so much flash, but it still stands out too much, like the cute girl was photoshopped in (which may have been the desired effect).
But the camera was too close on the right one. Perspective is wrong. The near elbow is as large as the face. Never stand too close. Stand back a little farther, 6 or 8 feet anyway, always, and then zoom in as desired, to preserve the perspective. Perspective is only about where the camera stands.
I'm hesitant to say anything, and have been putting it off. Because I think they show a lot of planned work, and came out pretty good, and I really don't want to criticize. I like the soft off-camera flash on the left one, and the rear lighting on both.
But I do have a couple of objections. One is that both show too much flash exposure. The skin tones are overexposed on the left one, flat, not even pink. The dress just clearly shouts overexposed too (the button itself does not bother me, a bit less flash would solve it). The right one is not so much flash, but it still stands out too much, like the cute girl was photoshopped in (which may have been the desired effect).
But the camera was too close on the right one. Perspective is wrong. The near elbow is as large as the face. Never stand too close. Stand back a little farther, 6 or 8 feet anyway, always, and then zoom in as desired, to preserve the perspective. Perspective is only about where the camera stands.
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Re: Constructive Criticism please
I like the work. The second one I like the bokeh, the light casting on the field and the light in her hair. One thing that jumps out at me are the whites of her eyes. They look too white, like they were overdone in post. It could be because I just got a new monitor. Nice work rennocneb
I like the work. The second one I like the bokeh, the light casting on the field and the light in her hair. One thing that jumps out at me are the whites of her eyes. They look too white, like they were overdone in post. It could be because I just got a new monitor. Nice work rennocneb