I'm quite ok with the composition, although I may have moved the placement of the lines to perhaps one side, and then angled my own position to make the lines run from corner to middle , but thats just me. Its a little flat monotone wise ( i have some of my own that turned out the same )
Not sure if you were after anything more than subject critique, but the photo is full of nasty artifacts, which reveal themselves when we click on the photo to get the real size. Its probably happened in the mono conversion, and you've played with the sliders to some degree and not noticed. Also the focus on the far end is horrible, but not sure why that is.....
See the crop below